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Fiction Friday with The Domestic Fringe
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Yesterday I said my post would be late, but I had no idea we’d get a bad thunderstorm last night and the server for our internet connection would be down due to lightning. I guess I’m glad I wasn’t planning to post early in the day. 🙂
Today I’m giving you a bit of dialogue. It comes at the end of chapter two, post funeral for Francine, Lacy’s Mimi. I know I’m skipping around, but I’d like a little feedback on the dialogue.
Thanks so much for reading!
Tony took Lacy by the elbow and pushed them through the crowd. The mood in The Elks Lodge went from sorrow, to an alcohol induced mourning for a once peaceful and quite town. Tony pushed open the old wooden door and Lacy gulped cool air. She felt her head clear as she walked down the steps and across the gravel lot.
“My truck’s just around the corner. I left it here earlier today knowing I’d need it tonight.”
Opening the passenger’s side door, Tony asked “Where are you staying? Mason said you wouldn’t stay at his house.”
“I’m at the Knight’s Inn. As much as I love Mason’s girls, I just couldn’t stay there. I needed some time alone.”
“Isn’t that what you’ve had for the last five years? No one’s even seen you in all that time.”
Tony walked around and got in the driver’s seat.
“You always going shut me out Lacy? I thought we were friends, at least we were a long time ago.”
“Tony, we are friends. It’s just that…I can’t…I don’t know.” Lacy leaned her head on the cold window and glanced over at Tony. “You know I spent time in a psyche hospital last fall?”
“Oh, Flower.” Using her childhood name, Tony reached over and grabbed her hand, warm with the life of a girl he no longer knew. “I didn’t know. Mason never told me.”
“Mason didn’t know. I want to keep it that way. They said I have a psychiatric disorder, Dissociative Identity Disorder. I guess I never really knew who I was anyway.”
“Did they help you?”
“At the time yes, but it’s the voices…I just can’t quiet them, especially at night.”
“What do they say?”
“Different things. Mostly they tell me things I already know, but I’ve tried to forget. It’s like my memory comes to life and I can’t silence it. Do you know what it’s like to have people talking to you in your head, reminding you of how screwed up you are, how you’ll never be normal, how no-one will ever love you?”
“Please Tony. Don’t tell me you’re sorry. I don’t want sympathy. I want to be free. I want to be human, the normal girl next door. I don’t want to live like this.”
“Lacy, don’t say that. You are normal. Remember all the times we had fun, the times we cut school and went ice-skating down at the pond? You’re not crazy. You’re hurting and you won’t let anyone close enough to help you. Who’s helping you in New York?”
“I see Jayne Sellers, a psychotherapist, once a week. Actually, I have her on speed dial. I met her in the hospital and she’s been talking to me, helping me deal with things. Sometimes I just wonder if it’s enough. If the voices will ever stop.”
“Look at me, please.”
Lacy turned and looked Tony full in his blue eyes.
“I want to help you too, Lacy. Please let me.”